The layout and space in my room is the most important thing in my room to me. I really enjoyed this story. There are three brass coloured wall lamps scattered around the room that have been pulled out their sockets and painted under, there are small clusters of hooks and hangers ready for decoration like a wonderful poster and a few of my creations from school. I wouldnt mind a bigger bed, though! My bed is on the right hand side of my door, and when I wake up the sun is shining in my eyes because the window is opposite to my bed. I like how you made them all simple but have a bit of depth. In the corner an old dark glory box to go with the old wooden jewelry box upon the set of draws. At the back of my room there is a large window exposing the magnificent mountains covered in a blanket of snow, my other window gives a happy view of a fence which we share with our neighbour. My golly gosh it's apigsty Ill be honest its like a pig lives in their. Your writing is very descriptive. But all my room is really for is sleeping and playing Xbox. But you did miss out a few commas. 3+. Then the colour of the furniture from a blue to a lighter colour. It has a stuffed toy pit on the other side of the room as you walk in and it has a shelf above it with more toys, piggy banks, my xbox that doesn't work, my books and other stuff. I can also take out anger when I am annoyed and I needed my drums to practice for my drum lessons. In my room I also have a painting the my Aunty drew for me, It is a huge field of wheat with huts in them but no people from what you can see. So, now the walls. On the opposite wall to that I have a standard size mat, a white mirror with one small painting beside it, the painting is of a small girl with a soft red dress on dancing. Awesome description of your room Alex. I dont really have any toys, My room has a lot of matching colors because my room is a modern color. The walls of my room are not too interesting at the moment, as they are covered in a bright white wall paper sealer ready for my new paint colours of white and teal blue. Another is made by myself, I got to design and paint it however I liked. With the midnight black dumbells and tackle bag, race red resistance bands and all my large cricket and rugby bags. I also have a variety of colourful possessions around the room. My bedroom has One build in wardrobe that has clothes towering out of it, a nice warm and comfy bed that usually is never made, One big window with an amazing view, A drawer with clothes stuffed inside, One bookshelf with books from when I was little and a big abstract mountain photo hanging above my bed. Messy ,Modern and comforting thats how i would describe my bedroom. cock is life. Your next step is to use a wider range of vocabulary to more easily describe your room. The theme of my bedroom is black, white, blue and grey. When you walk into my room you can tell it is mine because my name is on my wardrobe door and my room is the only room in the house that has a blue wall. My walls are a light gray with light gray carpet but also my sheets on my bed are gray as well. So, you could imagine someone who has just put lights all over their house standing back, looking at it, and remarking: my home is now a Christmas tree!, Another time you might use this is if you drive up your driveway to your home and see that all the lights are on inside. I noticed that most of your words you could spell right. However there is only one change I can offer, that is a change of colour to a blue or a nice green, maybe even a feature wall. Megan your vocab was very good with describing things. My tiny wardrobe has been painted the same colour as my wall apart from the handles and legs which i think looks pretty cool, and my desk is covered with random bits of paper and a couple of monitors. Well done. Im a bit compulsive, whereas is Sam is often tired or moody, so the room not only has the consistency of Two-Face in cleanliness, but will also resemble him; one half dark, messy and overall ugly, one half clean, clear and less ugly. Youd need to think of something your home reminds you of: a zoo, a swamp, a castle, or a zen retreat. Next, the dampness, if you accidentally leave something on the ground its automatically soaked, well at least when you leave a cup out you have something to drink in the morning. Looking a bit further up you can see a sky light, the plastic that covers it from the reflective tube in the attic isnt fastened properly so if somebody slams a door somewhere it vibrates and makes such a commotion. I look up at the ceiling and see a spider in the corner. Most times I just laugh because sometimes he is just plain old stupid. The wardrobe is the oldest piece of furniture in my room it was there when the house was built which was a long time ago. I personally love my bedroom. Your mother or father might have taught you a lot of dishes to cook or given you a lot of games to play to help your brain. My bed is nearly always made. I like black and white because it doesn't make the room feel too bright and the way it is placed and I like it that way. So in conclusion my bedroom is the best in the house because it soft, layout just for me the colors just right and last of all it's the only place in the whole house where I can get some alone time and not be nagged! Your writing was exactly as I remember it. Some of its correct. Great descriptions and fun to read. So to end it off I love my room it is fun to do trick shots in and playing with lego just in my closet I have a little bit of room so I want to place a chair in there with a lamp and have as my little private area so I can play on my ipod read books and also use it to hid from people when we are playing hide and seek with little kids. well done, BRIDGETS BEDROOM My duvet has white and pink checkers on it, ontop of that I have a small blue blanket with symmetrical squares on it. My bed. MY BEDROOM My most special object in my room is my tiger picture above my bed. When I look walk inside my bedroom and look out the window I see the big pine trees blowing swiftly in the wind and the bed just waiting to be made since yesterday. In my wardrobe I have shelves for my books and drawers for all my clothes. You needed to double check your punctuation and spelling as there are quite a few mistakes when it comes to these areas. I raced around the corner and opened the door to my bedroom. The layout of my bedroom is great but i dont like it. The only messy things in my room is my carpet. Even though my room hasnt got much in it, my room is the tidiest bedroom there. 5. Notepads and pens are strewn everywhere, useless papers accompanying them. I slowly put my hand on the door handle and opened it, the sun instantly warmed me up, the colours stood out, the bed looked very cosy and the wall decoration looked very creative and bright. My room is a square room and is medium sized, I am lucky enough that I have it all to myself. 6. as noisy as the market. Above my bed are decorations and then across from my bed there is my creamy white set of draws. Then to the right of my wardrobe is my tv cabinet which is a light brown wooden cabinet and it holds the usual tv, PS4 and XBOX 360 My room is the perfect size for all my things and for me and thats how I like it. It also has jumps for my motorbike but you cant really see them because they are covered over with grass since I dont go on them much anymore. A time where I can focus on myself and feel peace. Under both of those beds there are fold out trundlers made for if i want more people in my room so in total i can have a staggering four people in my room! Lastly is the layout. There's really not much sound in my room at all, it's quiet and if you're lucky you can hear the animals outside. sleeps in my room. The material on this site can not be reproduced, distributed, transmitted, cached or otherwise used, except with prior written permission of Multiply. The layout of my bedroom is the thing I most like about my room. Over all it was well done. Next to them I have tall, white draws bulging with clothes. Because its too big to get out the door and it sits almost in front of my door and we cant get it out and I hate it. Spot on Dylan, explained your bedroom very well. Lots of descriptive words and nouns and adjectives make for interesting writing and make it really easy to read. Still have questions? Well done!!! Now heres why everything is where it is, so both king single beds are right up against the creamy walls because well I dont really enjoy having my annoying sister in my room but mum says she has to so I tried to keep us as far apart as possible. 3-. Sences in my bedroom are a fresh air smell, because the window is usually open in my room. I have always enjoyed my bedroom as describes the character of me, as it being a part of my life, it describes the aspects of what I like such as colours, patterns, decoration and the bedroom layout. I think that your piece of writing was great! The editing for your description is great, haven't found any mistakes. Metaphor for a messy room crossword clue. This makes our room one of the darkest rooms in our house. I am happy that Thomas likes his room, airy and small and keeps it tidy. Here, theyre using comparison (that a vault is hard to get into, just like the home), but instead of saying like a vault, theyre saying is a vault, for literary effect. A typical-sized pond is also viewable, although you must be up much closer to see the timid fish hiding under the pondweed. Next to my bed is a brown wooden three drawer bedside cabinet which has edges that have been chewed on by dogs. Luckily for me I dont have much to tidy, unlike my brother. Nevertheless your writing is lyrical, has rhythm and engages the reader. Flagstone Cost Per Pallet, Very poor punctuation and vocabulary, sometimes it was very hard to follow what you where saying. On the left hand side under the window, with its red quilt and white duvet is the biggest piece of furniture in my room. But I don't even know why the window is there in the first place! Yeah I know I left it messy on monday but I promise you I cleaned it up as soon as I got home [wink wink]. My bed has a wooden bed frame that comes up tall where my head is and not so tall where my feet are. The movie is about a family trying to save their home (their castle) from developers who are trying to forcibly take it off them. This was both literal and metaphorical in the movie Shrek where the ogre Shrek lived in a swamp. My bedroom is the second largest bedroom in my house, and in this description writing I will describe to you about my bedroom by my accessories, layout/space, color and furniture so here we go. Most of my accessories are very modern as same are made out of glass or clay. Great writing. You have got great vocabulary, I didn't really see anything that wrong. Good peace of writing. Except for the Furniture paragraph. The floor in my bedroom. Also my bed is a queen which is always made with colorful sheets on It. It's like a prison for books and random junk, and you never see it again until you decide to move your room around, which for me is usually every 3 years or so. The ideas are great and relevant to the topic. The cloths on the large draws with the big mirror really need to be tidied up and put away properly then there is the pile of bags that have my ski gear and cricket bag the big bags could deffently be tidyed up and put in the garag. Brothers Of A Feather Driving Wheel Lyrics, Good job colt. My room has many accessories, there is pictures, paintings, plants and other things too. But I enjoyed reading this but you keep spelling "color" the wrong way it's "colour.". Most times all you can hear is the clicking of my keyboard on either my ipod or laptop. For next time you could use more vocabulary and try not to repeat words. It has a very spacious drawer that pulls out from underneath. Next time just maybe double check spelling. Really liked it Chris! I love it because it is the only room in my house where I can lock myself away from the rest of the world. It's Romeo's line about his inamorata: "Juliet is the sun." Moving on from the layout of my bedroom to the layout of my walls. Ok I have got a lot of things in my room but some of my favorites are the accessories. you could add some more descriptive words, Angus your punctuation was good but your spelling had a couple of 'i's in stead of a I. the spelling was great and I really enjoyed reading the of writing you worked on. In the distance you can see the woolshed, it is made out of corrugated iron, like the chook shed it is pretty messy on the inside though. The story behind this is that ogres are usually thought of as being dirty, smelly, and unkept. I enjoy spending my own time just lying on my bed listening to music. This final piece of text will be explaining the lighting. The touch, it's soft, smooth and warm at night. The accessories in my room are mainly either the same as or matching the colour scheme in my room. I have lots of little nips and nobs that I use to make my room more interesting. Outside if you are lucky you can hear the birds chirping because my mum throws bread outside for the them to eat in the winter months. The colours in your room must be very bright with the sun on it and I can visualise your room. I have to admit though mum doesn't like the amount of time I spend in it. My bedroom is Santa's workshop during December. On the right hand side as you walk in there is an orange feature wall with a small white window towards the top. Also I have bad eyesight so It Is really hard to see my tv from my bed. What is the time signature of the song Atin Cu Pung Singsing? I like how I am able to visualize your bedroom. You could add more information on the accessories in your room. My room smells inviting, it's like strawberries mixed with flowers (which smells good). Nicely described George, your room is currently a blank canvas so you can do a lot with it. Awards are the next important thing that has to be hung up to admire the things I have done. For example, the metaphor of an industrial factory is often used by biologists to communicate the complex process of a cell. I don't care what people think about it because its my own space. It also has a table which is made from birch. On the wall where my bed is place there is my name, the letters carved in wood and painted in pink with many forms of glitter, sequins and charms all stuck to them. The walls have a paint swirl on it that comes off the wall about 5 cm and it looks awesome! My bedroom is exactly the way I like it and can tell you a story about my personality, if you read on you will know about my personality and go for a virtual journey through my bedroom. There are also some capital letters that are in the wrong place. I really liked that you used some really great words that have me hooked in. A strange smell like no other. A few things to fix up but over all it was good. As Ive already said I have a painting of Clifton Beach hanging above my bed, it is landscape and the colours combinations are awesome. But there are a few errors like no enters between your intro and first point. They will use and expand upon it again and again within creative writing and narrative writing topics, and there are so many ways to get those creative juices flowing. I have a brown drawers to keep all of my clothes in. An excellent description of your room Meg. In my bedroom I have a big abstract photo of mountains hanging above my head. I also have bright dots that include the colours of light and bright pink, a turquoise dark and light and yellow. Sometimes the temperature goes up and sometimes goes right down. Brown that stands out because of the shine. I didn't see any spelling mistakes. Nice story and good use of commas and punctuation. The punctuation is almost flawless, as far as I can see. Your editing hasn't been done too poorly Joel. I'm pleased you like your room Christopher. I have boxes for my bits and bobs, they are blue, pink and purple. Keep up the good work. Although I could make a change as I would like a desk where I could do my work. My room is not the most spectacular, but it is the one place that I can call my own. In my bedroom standing in the doorway looking at it. I do 'nag' at you to clean your room. Write something about yourself. Its plywood walls and lumpy concrete floor give it a rugged and unique feel. The ceilings are high and have a wooden trim around the perimeter of the room. Needs work on the punctuation. Very good vocabulary Sophie.I could imagine i was there. My room has a lot of sport contents. I love my room and everyone loves their room but me living in newly renovated garage is great but has some downsides to it. I could imagine looking at the things you described. I also have my Xbox which is of the things I play when Im not doing anything. But the worst thing about having a messy room is the feeling that you have of dreading about actually cleaning it. A lumpy duvet lies messily on the thick mattress that cradles me at night. as your room! I liked how you had good ideas in your writing but you didn't have that many. My parents make me keep it tidy for good habits. My room has an area where I keep drawing and pictures, an area for me to keep my collections. Very well written. Alexs bedroom Also my room is full of stuff to have fun with but my favorite thing to do is make cool trickshot area so I can record them and post them on to my YouTube channel. The soft and wooly ground. My room to me is the most warmest place in house which makes my room cozy and casual. Well in my bedroom I have blue and white walls. 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